Blog 6

Workshopping was overall a good experience.  We were able to discuss each group member's draft and share opinions and suggestions.  The feedback from my group that I found most useful involved the beginning and end of my draft.  My group felt that my opening sentence, also its own paragraph, served as a very effective hook.  They pointed out to me, however, that my ending lacked the same "oomph."  They suggested closing with another powerful sentence similar to the opening.  I found this suggestion very useful and I have been trying to think of the proper sentence to serve this purpose.  As far as the feedback I offered, it is more difficult to judge what might have been the "best."  One suggestion that I offered to Chrissy seemed to have been well-received.  I suggested mentioning or alluding to the "home" theme that concluded her essay at another point closer to the beginning.  She and I discussed this, and she seemed to believe it was a good idea too.  I have a lot of work to do overhauling my draft based on comments from the professor and my group, but I am very grateful for the opportunity to have received feedback.  It's very valuable and interesting to see how other people react to something I have written.